没太看懂。。。
怎么就突然 As a result了

看完了
充满了一种传统机翻的美

再多写5块的

can you tell me your name你听过哪个外国人这样说

有些中式英语的感觉，句子组合在一起很多地方都不通顺
英语只有在英语思维下写出来才能读得通顺，这个还是需要克服中翻的习惯

it's no goood to go to a brothel, and be aware those whores r bad for ur health both mentally and physically and u know what some viruses spread only through intimacy. boy

完全就是中式英语

你这不是英语，你这是汉语的变种

Yesterday, I went to the clubhouse with my friends, and by the time we arrived, only two women remained. One was strikingly beautiful, while the other… well, she wasn’t as fortunate in the looks department.
My friend nudged me with a grin and said, “The beautiful one’s yours. The lights go off just the same for me—what matters is the vibe, not the appearance, right?”
Amused but grateful, I stepped into a room with the beautiful woman. As we started chatting, something about her struck me as oddly familiar. Then it hit me—she reminded me of my first love.
That realization changed everything. Instead of giving in to fleeting desires, I spent the night lost in conversation with her, reliving old feelings and exploring new ones. Before we knew it, dawn had arrived.
As the first light crept into the room, I asked softly, “What’s your name?”
Leaning close, she whispered a single word in my ear: “Jia Shan.”
And then, just like a dream, she was gone, leaving me whispering her name into the morning light— Jia Shan… Jia Shan.

给你参考下我的版本
I've been to clubhouse for many times, and I always saw a lotta young women sitting there talking, laughing, and suddenly I found a sad girl, so sorrow, heart-broken, just like a fallen angel, or just like a big fat snow white. I came close to her, and I could tell she was wearing a fig perfume, which was a little bit exotic for me, I couldn't stop scintillating and flirted her with some jokes. then, her heart was open for me. I took her to the hotel to get some nips. No sooner had the door closed than she jumped on my belly with herpussy open right up. 'fancy a ride?' she said, I couldn't wait to put my lao'er into her deep forest without a raincoat, after several hours of in-and-out, we worked up quite a thirst. she reluctantly let go of me. I was like being gutted. she wasn't sad any more. you see.... I'm just a doctor of love.